Weekend Writing Warriors #8SUNDAY


Hey friends,  The interview went well this week, I should hear back sometime this coming week.  In the meanwhile I’ve been working a ton of hours since a couple people at work are on vacation.

I’m quickly throwing together a start to a follow up story  on Liliana here, maybe you will let me know how you like it, so I can proceed from here?

********************************************************************************************************

“What are you saying Sebastian?”  I asked angrily.

I leaned over and rolled up my slacks, climbing across the moss covered rocks to join him.  He turned away from me and climbed up higher on the rocks, his face blushing ferociously.

“Esperanza, don’t you think it’s strange that you’re so much darker then the rest of us.”  Sebastian asked very seriously.

“I look like mommy,”  I said quietly, biting my lip and retreating a step.

I couldn’t believe what he was implying as he looked away and shook his head without saying a word.

********************************************************************************************************

And that’s it.  I hope you enjoyed it.  Visit my Weekend Writing Warrior friends here.

www

Love my writing and want to read more?  Click here to find these great stories on Amazon or other online retailers.

electrifying-banner-11.jpg

Liliana 5 (2)This ChristmasInTooDeepCVRARe

or read my columns in Reflejos Newspaper here

Advertisements

About nevasquiresrodriguez

Neva Squires-Rodriguez was born and raised in a neighborhood located on the North Side of Chicago. Mother, Wife, Expert at Multitasking... and now, Author and Columnist for Reflejos Newspaper, Neva creates electrifying stories with a twist. Neva Squires-Rodriguez earned her Masters Degree from National University, a feat which she worked very hard to obtain and says she will work even harder to pay off. She claims to be a typical American, full of dreams that will hopefully get her to a more comfortable lifestyle one day. She says, “God has a plan and I will follow wherever it is that He takes me.”
This entry was posted in Uncategorized. Bookmark the permalink.

10 Responses to Weekend Writing Warriors #8SUNDAY

  1. chellecordero says:

    The implication is leaving a million questions unanswered. Great way to hook your readers.

    Liked by 1 person

  2. Chelle is correct. Your implication and build up is fantastic. And you’ve done a great job with the emotion. I don’t know how many drafts into this story you are, but I would caution you to be careful with your use of adverbs in dialogue tags. I’m not one of those writers who thinks they should never be used, but in this snippet you have three of them in close order. I think if you replace two with an action of some sort, you’ll find your story becomes more fluid. Just my 2 cents! Great snippet and I hope you get positive news from your interviews.

    Liked by 1 person

  3. What a great start and way to draw your readers in! This poor girl has nothing but trouble, doesn’t she? 🙂

    Like

  4. Listen to Jess. I thought the same thing even as I read and felt anguish for Esperanza. Good eight.

    Liked by 1 person

  5. Frank Fisher says:

    I felt Esperanza’s pain. I agree with the other comments about the snippet raising so many questions. Great job with that! Fingers crossed that you get that job.

    Like

  6. Lorien Lyn says:

    Great dialogue exchange. Makes me wonder what’s going through her mind. 😉

    Liked by 1 person

  7. Nice visual on the moss covered rocks, Neva. Intriguing dialogue!

    Best wishes on getting the fulltime position! 🙂

    Like

  8. Karen Michelle Nutt says:

    What a snippet! Of course I want to know more. Loved the interaction of the characters.

    Like

  9. Uh oh, sounds like old secrets might be coming to light soon. Intriguing snippet!

    Liked by 1 person

Leave a Reply

Fill in your details below or click an icon to log in:

WordPress.com Logo

You are commenting using your WordPress.com account. Log Out / Change )

Twitter picture

You are commenting using your Twitter account. Log Out / Change )

Facebook photo

You are commenting using your Facebook account. Log Out / Change )

Google+ photo

You are commenting using your Google+ account. Log Out / Change )

Connecting to %s